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"People who don't know moths usually don't understand," she said. "Americans, especially. They think moths are just little superstars in ugly wrapping paper. That if we're given the right tools, we can become just as good as everyone else. Plain Jane syndrome, you know? Well it doesn't work like that."
"I think you could be a star," I said.
"Well, you're an American."

I wanted to touch her shoulder, or maybe her hair.
She didn't look like the kind that invited physical contact, so I didn't.

"I was born this way," she said. "I want to die this way too. Is that so strange?"
"Do you know what it means to be unfettered? It means not giving a shit."


The first Moth piece: [link]

I know it's not comedy, but the Moth series is surprisingly easy to write.

I don't know why I keep wanting to put this series in Science Fiction. I think I'll figure it out eventually though.

Critique is always, always desired. I feel a bit more sophisticated when I write like this. ;D
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AnonDesu Oct 3, 2010  Professional Writer
Aw :<

That reminds me of something my cousin said in response to something I said. About moths.

He's kinda a pessimist.
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AGMeade Aug 31, 2010  Professional Writer
You know, I really loved the original moth story. I don't like this one as much. I think its because I'm American. ;-)

Seriously though, this one is missing that sort of innocence that the first had. I think that's what made the other so appealing. This one positively oozes cynicism.
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forWinds Aug 3, 2010  Student Writer
:clap: WHY ARE YOU SUCH A GOOD WRITER? WHY?

In such few words, I can see so much... It's truly amazing.

You're amazing. Yeah, I said it. You are, though. :D
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Oh be quiet, you're a better writer than me and you know it. D8<

This piece seemed a little lackluster when I read over it. I'm glad you liked it, though. I might continue this little series.
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forWinds Aug 3, 2010  Student Writer
DO IT DO IT DO IT DO IT.


please. :)
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Censor-Man Aug 3, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I remember the other moth one...but I should re-read it so I understand this one a bit better. >_<
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I need to link up to it in the description. I'll do that now. ;D
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