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“We thought getting him drunk would open him up.”
“Did it?”
“No. It shut him down.”
An elongated snore came from the general direction of the couch, and they all turned to stare.
“We need to wake him up,” said Jude. “Pump him full of coffee.”
“He’s allergic to coffee,” said Noah. “It makes his nose stuff up.”
“Coffee is just a myth,” said Miriam. “My granddaddy tried coffee every time he got pissed and all it ever did was give him the runs.”
Jude took a delicate step away from the couch. After another gut-choking snore, so did Miriam and Noah.
“Did he say anything interesting before he fell asleep?” Miriam asked hopefully.
“He said never trust gardeners and where did the ceiling fan go.”
They all looked up.
The ceiling fan was gone.
“Did it?”
“No. It shut him down.”
An elongated snore came from the general direction of the couch, and they all turned to stare.
“We need to wake him up,” said Jude. “Pump him full of coffee.”
“He’s allergic to coffee,” said Noah. “It makes his nose stuff up.”
“Coffee is just a myth,” said Miriam. “My granddaddy tried coffee every time he got pissed and all it ever did was give him the runs.”
Jude took a delicate step away from the couch. After another gut-choking snore, so did Miriam and Noah.
“Did he say anything interesting before he fell asleep?” Miriam asked hopefully.
“He said never trust gardeners and where did the ceiling fan go.”
They all looked up.
The ceiling fan was gone.
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About twenty were named "The"
About thirty were named "Mary-"
And near eighty were untitled.
So after much work, much dedication, and a lot of screaming, I have cleansed my writing folder into a neat little pile with considerably less confusion.
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About twenty were named "The"
About thirty were named "Mary-"
And near eighty were untitled.
So after much work, much dedication, and a lot of screaming, I have cleansed my writing folder into a neat little pile with considerably less confusion.
And. I. Found. This. Piece.
Told you I'd find it. >>
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I love how much of the mood comes through pure dialogue in this, and the spareness of your style in general. I do want to see a longer piece where they go looking for the fan, or at least get a little bit of a start (say, they find a clue)--this scene is well-written, and there should be more!